The marriage path

26 02 2007

A purpose for their life together
The moist trudging of Wellington boots
Walking towards their future
They walk along the woodland path.

The moist trudging of Wellington boots
Hand in hand they walk along
They walk along the woodland path
Bodies tilted towards each other.

Hand in had they walk along
The musty smell of autumn leaves
Bodies tilted towards each other
Shiraz and ochre; the setting sun.

The musty smell of autumn leaves
In conversations they build their future
Shiraz and ochre; the setting sun
Now that the children are grown

In conversations they build their future
Walking towards the winter
Now that the children are grown
A purpose for their life together

This is my first attempt at a Pantoum. Over the weekend I read Zadie Smith ‘On Beauty’ and in it there is a college tutor who teaches her class about this form. I had never heard of it before but I like the way it rolls back onto itself and was inspired to give it a try.

I decided to rework the short piece ‘Towards Winter‘ because I thought the subject matter fitted well; the repetition of their steps in line with the way the pantoum repeats.

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2 responses

20 03 2007
thecandles

Great!!! You are just great!… This is a very good poem…May God Bless you and use you more…come and visit my infact our blog sometimes…
Chiradeep

22 02 2009
Writing Sestinas and Pantoums (and other mathmatical challenges) « Jenny Love

[…] that I’ve already enjoyed trying out the Pantoum (another of our optional taught forms) I’m thinking I may have a go at submitting […]

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